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Curvy and Lines by iruhdam Curvy and Lines by iruhdam
.........pls comment!!
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First of all i want to start by saying that this is a very good start for doing a first typography artwork.
Then i want to say, that all my points are my own personal perception, so apologies if i don't quite hit your mind ;)

I really like the choice of colours you made, blue and brown always go togethere very well. choosing a Sans Serif font is clever, as it goes well with the lines and is not a concurrence to them like a Serif font would be.
Using a texture is always a good way of achieving more depth and a more natural look, which works very well for this piece.

But talking about the texture, i think it might have too much contrast in itself, it takes a lot of attention, which should rather be on the lines and the typography. Now i dont't know wether the texture itself is already blue, or wether it is colored, but i think it would be worth a try to put the texture as top layer and multiply with the rest of the artwork, including lines and typography. that might pull the whole thing a bit more together.
I would definetely change the corners of the lines in the "zig zag"-part. i know that happens in illustrator, but with transforming the lines into shapes, you could probably get rid of these.
To add more depth to the curves, you could use a little drop-shadow at about 15% transparency, especially there, where the curves overlay each other.
About the typogrpahy: i like the placement and the turns it makes. but i would try to keep the same distance between the words and the lines. it sometimes looks a bit off, and trying to keep the same distance might help to make the whole piece a bit "tighter".

Overall, i think it's a good piece of typography with a lot of potential to become even better.
I hope you like what i wrote :) ...and i hope it's good to understand ;)

Cheers,
Anne | =pica-ae

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First thing that popped through my mind was a set of wires or cables. Than I saw pipes. So I enjoy this greatly. Even thought its not three-d, its still very impressive. I enjoy how the context of the picture is represented. The edges do bother me, but again I am OCD :aww: but other than that I do enjoy the text and how it comes off it.

Also I think the most greatest thing on that is the background because its black in the middle and then expands to blue, creating a night time theme or maybe a vast universe feeling to it. I hope you keep up your good work and do really well in the future.
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Griffunt Featured By Owner May 28, 2009
Nice pic!
But i dont like the zigzag. I think a wave would fit better :)
And the colors are nice, maybe a bit too much difference between brown and blue :D


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iruhdam Featured By Owner May 28, 2009  Professional General Artist
Thank you sooo much for the comment and the fav!!
That's really a booster!
anyways i'll try to make another one as what u suggested......![a entirely newer version maybe!!
thanks!!:):love: :hug:
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Griffunt Featured By Owner May 28, 2009
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